TA Tone, Style application for Health Paper.

For this up coming paper on Health care I am trying to --hone-- My Tone--, and slick my style, for this up coming paper. Here is an exurp that I habe been working on. The purpose of this segment of my paper is to target the basic econimic realities that most all educated people understand. The tone is a bit more formal and the apeal is to economic logic. How do I do? thanks

Currently the United States spends $2 trillion on health care. The fraction of gross domestic product spent on health services has increased over many years, totaling now one-seventh of gross domestic product. Health care spending has risen because, on the supply side, quality of care has increased and often higher quality is associated with higher prices. But demand for health care services has also increased because of improved quality of health services and longevity. People live longer and thus demand more health care to maintain a high quality of life. Further, technological advances have given people more options for highquality care. Treatment for ailments in the health care sector has a large discretionary component.
Some people opt to be treated for mild depression, decreased mobility, cosmetic concerns, etc., others do not. As the quality of life-improvement services increases, more people take advantage of these new options, as expected when quality of services rises faster than its price. This sum of circumstances can explain much of the increase in health care spending. At the same time, it would be interesting to know what would happen to demand if more patients were paying out of pocket. To spend more on medical services and less on food or housing is an individual’s choice, and from an economic perspective this is no problem if choices are not distorted, as for example through public subsidies. As we get richer as a nation, we may decide to devote more and more resources to health care, because our basic needs for food and housing are fulfilled, to further improve our quality of life.